id say

it could probably use some drums, id go with some grungy distorted lo-fi stuff, it would sound cool with what you have started, and maybe some strings. I think that would make the track feel more complete.

-Surgeon

i like this alot

i dont know if i would exactly consider it industrial, but i like it. The intro is a little long, but once the song really kicks in its pretty bad ass. The drums are almost used as a melody,which works out really well, i too like them.
i could see this track being used for spoken word, something dramatic.
good track, make more of this style.

-Surgeon

really cool

i dont like much from the drum and bass genre, but this is good, unique, and diverse.
it almost reminds me of the drum solo from Nine Inch Nails " The perfect drug", in a few places, good work. keep it up.

-Surgeon